[Gabby Rivera]

Maria, this is such a deeply emotional piece. Thank you for being so vulnerable in your writing and with us in class. The steps are a standout element. They encourage the reader to follow them, as well as allowing insight into what’s most important in your life. This is excellent drafting by the way, like exactly what needs to get down on the page before some editing & revising. An elevation note for you would be: Weave in more details. Name the play, the awards. Let the details add depth to the writing. When it comes to the ingredients, tell us how much love to give and when, etc. Keep it specific to you and your family/needs. There is still much left to write and release. You’ve got this.