[Stefanie DeMaria]

Thank you for reading. This builds upon my submission from the Week 2 quick write

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[Robin Nixon]

Stefanie, this is so beautiful and comforting. I loved the use of “past selves” and pots that retain a memory. And so many precious lines. I’d love maybe one sentence or clause clearly stating the relationship between the writer and the receiver. I read this in an agitated mood, and felt better by the time I got to the end.

[Maria J. Matta-Ortiz]

Stefanie, I love this piece, it felt like a warm hug. I can feel the warmest, sweetness, and softness of the avena intertwined with the story. I especially loved this line and sentiment throughout “The sugar is the vessel, but the memory is what actually sweetens the avena.” The story was the vessel, but the details are what sweetened and warmed the feeling behind it. Great job.

[Gabby Rivera]

Stefanie, this is exquisite. Like all across the board, absolutely beautiful. You have the gift. The writing spirit is within you and on the page. Keep honoring the spirit and yourself. This line is a perfect representation of the importance of specific details and how they uplift every sentence: Use a pot that holds memory. Whether its the pot you use to rinse your child’s hair during her bath or the pot she bangs on when she’s testing how loudly she can take up space. My only elevation note is to go through and take out some of those “Yous”. Most of them aren’t needed and the ones you choose to keep in will stand out. You can cut some of your sentences in half to make two really strong sentences. But really, you’ve got the magic and I’m so thankful you’re sharing your writing with us.

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