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Maria, that last paragraph could be an entire chapter. It’s so layered and full of emotion. You could really dig deep there and build out something so powerful. The tension was thick all around. You grappling with the term sin vergüenza and the legacy of your bisabuela is deeply felt and handled with so much care. I could feel it when you wrote about holding your tongue and making yourself small. Also, the way you pull shame right out into the middle of it all is so important too. Excited to read more of your work.
Maria, you have a way with describing memories that leaves my breath stolen. I can see your Abue’s hands right with you and feel the weight of their memory. The last paragraph is so touching and yet filled with such ache. I’d love to see you tap into more memory work if that is something you feel compelled to do in future prompts. I’m so excited to see what you write next.
“My abue had very big hands, the type of hands that would knead masa to make tortillas de arina and tamales. The type of hands that cleaned rich white people’s homes since she got to this country…” I loved this line because I could feel this memory and envision it for myself. Thank you!
