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Attached. This one was also hard to write.
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You must be logged in to view attached files.Stefanie, I love this piece, it felt like a warm hug. I can feel the warmest, sweetness, and softness of the avena intertwined with the story. I especially loved this line and sentiment throughout “The sugar is the vessel, but the memory is what actually sweetens the avena.” The story was the vessel, but the details are what sweetened and warmed the feeling behind it. Great job.
Amar, I loooovvee this piece because I can relate so much. I love me some Juanga, he is one of the top artists of all time and I resonated with your piece deeply. I love how you took us on a journey with the songs and the ages they reminded you of. The details of that were so visually appealing and relatable. I also love how you weaved the recipe in talking about his own ritual for performance, it was so seamless. And lastly, I really enjoyed how you connected it back to you and the use of your voice, which is strong in this writing. Also, Juanga as THE Sinverguenza Ancestor was chef’s kiss.
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You must be logged in to view attached files.Jennifer! You took us on a journey because you were on a journey grappling with sin verguenzaness. I really loved this line “While the vergüenza has a highlight reel at the ready, the “sin” has a constellation of word, song, and memory inspiring and reminding me that the more I feel, the more I feel.” I very much relate to this, and the idea of being an aspiring sin verguenza. I appreciated how you wove in the different quotes, and would love to see you go more in-depth to bring them into the story/writing.
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