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  • in reply to: Favorite Place, Favorite Person #2335
    Robin Nixon
    Sin Verguenza

      Hi Stefanie,

      Just wanted to share that your piece made me tear up a little. Sharing your heart with someone you care for, in a place you are about to leave, but hope to write you way back to… It is powerful. Especially the mini manifesto about Art’s rightful role in society.

      This is my favorite line: “I’m the creative dreamer who sees theaters as churches filled with ghosts of stories passed.” Write those plays! Thank you for sharing.

      Robin

      in reply to: Favorite Places, Favorite Person #2334
      Robin Nixon
      Sin Verguenza

        I love this Julian. So many fun colorful details, my favorite being “a 250 pound Filipino man drop into a full split onto the sticky club floor to Rupaul’s Supermodel?” So much personality through out and then a very touching ending. Thank you for “laughing into my heart” — now I have words for that feeling. Will you send this to Alex? – Robin

        in reply to: Week 1 Letters Quick Write #2316
        Robin Nixon
        Sin Verguenza

          Damn! This was great. So much personality. I loved the tension and the climactic comeback. And this: “a truth wrapped in vulnerability only exposed when provoked.” So good. Thank you for sharing

          in reply to: Three Times I Felt Uplifted In Class… #2315
          Robin Nixon
          Sin Verguenza

            I love this Stefanie. “there is no one way to be excellent” – so, so true. I totally agree this is a very special class. I would love to read more of your work, if your are ever looking for more feedback

            in reply to: Sin Vergüenzas Manifest #2300
            Robin Nixon
            Sin Verguenza

              More character work. Thank you for reading. And thank you for sharing last week. I felt such gratitude that I could listen in via a recording.

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              in reply to: Week 3 Quick Write: Sin Vergüenzas Uplifted #2296
              Robin Nixon
              Sin Verguenza

                The new quick write, plus

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                in reply to: Carmen’s Recipe #2280
                Robin Nixon
                Sin Verguenza

                  Stefanie, this is so beautiful and comforting. I loved the use of “past selves” and pots that retain a memory. And so many precious lines. I’d love maybe one sentence or clause clearly stating the relationship between the writer and the receiver. I read this in an agitated mood, and felt better by the time I got to the end.

                  in reply to: Writing Assignment 2: Prayer to a Sin Vergüenza Ancestor #2267
                  Robin Nixon
                  Sin Verguenza

                    Thanks for reading

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                    in reply to: To Ancestor, From a Sin Vergüenza #2250
                    Robin Nixon
                    Sin Verguenza

                      Hi Stefanie,

                      I am so glad I chose yours as one of my two to read. I am also estranged from my mother and found it shocking, healing and befuddling to look at my mother’s choices after becoming a mother myself. I am impressed by your self-compassion and maturity; both will do your own daughter well. Taking care of yourself is so important, always, but perhaps especially when kids are still in the baby/toddler stage. My eldest is 15 now, youngest is 7, and it just keeps getting better.

                      As a reader, I really appreciated the use of specific details. They brought color and realism to your piece. I found myself wanting more information on the reasons behind the estrangement, but the author must be ready to share that type of information first. It is fine to leave readers hanging. I have seen some authors work around that by specifically naming the thing they are NOT going to talk about. Something like “I don’t want to put into words what happened. I am sure you remember it as well as I do. Or maybe you remember it differently. I may never know.” Just an idea.

                      Thank you for sharing this. I hope to learn more about your story over the next few weeks.

                      Robin

                      in reply to: Dear Mom #2243
                      Robin Nixon
                      Sin Verguenza

                        This is poignant. I particularly noted how in people’s stories about the mother, they said she was “always” like this or “always” like that. That is so how people talk about people who have passed away. I also liked the plentiful questions, and the juxtaposition of the freedoms offered in different time periods. I loved learning about how the mother dressed and conducted herself. I’d love to know more details about how the writer dresses and conducts herself. Well done!

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